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meat_nipples
Hello all. Its been some time since I've posted here, though I've always been kind of a "lurker". Anyway, I wrote this a few glasses in late one night and figured this was the best place to share it. Reactions/comments/criticisms are all welcome.

Emerald Palaces
by Meat Nipples


I look down into the glass
Upon my own private sea
Of emerald palaces
Long since broken down

Each drop of water
Like time to the weary mind
Clouds the crystalline perfection
And initiates the rituals of a new season

The swirling curves of glass
And the expanding opalescent torrents
Hide the gray reflecting ghost
Of a man I can’t forget

And to be for a second removed,
A luxury I pay for dearly,
Is like an unanswered prayer
I submit to every night

Expecting nothing in return

Head_prosthesis
QUOTE
Expecting nothing in return



I'm going to break the spell and give you my critique.

It didn't rhyme. Poetry should rhyme.
I want some rhyme on that puppy...


Like this...


Emerald Sipples
by Meat Nipples


I look down into the glass
Upon my own private sea
Of Emerald Sipples
that will likely turn to pee

Each drop of water
Like ants in the grass
On a zipper tooth highway
that leads to your ass

The curves of your thighs
And your camel toe like exuberance
Incite the pink doughy shadow
Of my tumescent protuberance

And for a two ply removed,
off a wick I dipped dearly,
Tis like a dead jellyfish
I sling at you cavlierly

Just don't flush them down the toilet.





rjordan
Awesome Head!!! worshippy.gif ...You rock wit de words o' wisdom....
Head_prosthesis
I like to help.
viande verte
Yeah, you can't argue with a poem that rhymes.
rjordan
You help more than you think Headly... dev.gif cdog.gif

QUOTE
Like this here: Who wouldn't want one of these?!?!?!
rjordan
Damn, that was supposed to be the link that you posted...let me try it again.


Who wouldn't want one of these?!?!?!


It's not working?!?!?! mad.gif

O.k. here's the goddamn link...it's not as funny this way...


https://www.tomoffinland.com/miva/merchant....roduct_Code=AF1
Absomphe
Headster:

Thanks a lot!!

You've really done it to me this time.



I think I just opened up an old hernia laughing my ass off.!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! LARS!.gif
Head_prosthesis
Yes, you gotta love Tom af1.gif


Dear Abby,

You have a laughing Hyena?

Words are cool.
Morrigan
QUOTE
And for a two ply removed,
off a wick I dipped dearly,
Tis like a dead jellyfish
I sling at you cavlierly


Daaaayum. Baby, thems words are so romantic. Kallisti is indeed a lucky laydee.
Felis Catus
Head

That beats my fave rhymen' poet(Dr Seuss) all to hell.

Hell is swell
Swell is hell

I like the ringing
of Hell's Bell's

The ringing of
Hell's Bell's I like

As I ride by
on my trike

As I ride by
on my trike

I ring I ring
my little bell

I wish it was a
Bell of Hell

A Bell of Hell
A Hell of a Bell

I think it would
go Ding Dong Dell

I think Satan would
think it swell

My little Ding Dong
bell from Hell.



When do you plan to start writing for children,H.P?
Head_prosthesis
Immediately!


Head_prosthesis
QUOTE (Morrigan @ Jan 16 2004, 12:38 PM)
QUOTE
And for a two ply removed,
off a wick I dipped dearly,
Tis like a dead jellyfish
I sling at you cavlierly


Daaaayum. Baby, thems words are so romantic. Kallisti is indeed a lucky laydee.

Morrigan,

Soooo... Maybe this would have been
more appropriate?

"Now, I know it's right

From the moment I wake up
till deep in the night

There's no where on earth
that I'd rather be

Than holding you, tenderly"

Hey I didn't want to say it at dinner,
But Honey! The 80's sucked. The 70's
paled in comparison.

AND THANK YOU !!!
For yammering it up about the 80's.
The rest of the night "Close to the Edit"
& "The Dominatrix Sleeps Tonight" kept
ringing in my ears... But the worst was
inadvertantly bleeting out the chorus
of ST.ELMOS FIRE without realizing soon
enough. I almost knocked my teeth out
trying to cover up my mouth.

Dale Bozio *ptooey*
Felis Catus
St.Elmo's Fire-One of the worst movies ever made.
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Uncle
DUDE! Whats wrong with Dale Bozio? Do you own the Hustler issue? I love bottle blondes....yeah. Im write a letter to echo and the bunnymen!


Dearest Echo, ....... harhar.gif
Absomphe
Roald Dahl ain't got nothin' on you Head.

Willie Wonka better watch his sweet chocolate covered ass!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! shock.gif
Head_prosthesis
Dale Bozio in HUSTLER was the best
thing she ever did for the 80's...

Of course I own it, you know better than
that.

And Roald Dahl... Oy Vey! I could show
him a thing or two about writing kids
stories while your naked and teetering
over the keys drunk on rum.

I mean come on... A RIVER OF CHOCOLATE?
What kind of "anal"ogy is that for a child?
Uncle
I had to go to the thrifty acre at 1:30 am to get The Best of Missing Persons! $6.99 what a deal,what a value! She my new poster girl! I's loves me's some Dale tail if ya's knows what I means! Oh! yeah your words are dope! Right out of the heart of the D!! word to your mother , peace out. U.S. looking-up.gif
thegreenimp
We used to use the same acrylic hemispherical heads on our piping design models, just like her bra.
I miss those days........ boobs.gif
Morrigan
Head, I KNOW what spins around in that noggin' of yours. So let's not tip-toe around the subject, just put it all out there:

Growin' up - you don't see the writing on the wall.
Passin' by, movin' straight ahead you knew it all.
But maybe sometime if you feel the pain
you'll find you're all alone, everything has changed.

Play the game - you know you can't quit until it's won.
Soldier of only you can do what must be done. Chewbacca-2.gif
You know in some ways you're a lot like me
You're just a prisoner and you're tryin' to break free.

NOW SING ALONG!!
I can see a new horizon underneath the blazing sky,
I'll be where the eagles flying, higher and higher!
Gonna be your man in motion,
all I need is a pair of wheels.
Take me where the fututre's lying; St. Elmo's fire!!! w00t1.gif

Burning up - don't know just how far that I can go.
Soon be home - only just a few miles down the road.
And I can make it, I know I can litter-box.gif

You broke the boy in me - but you won't break the man. sleepy.gif

I can see a new horizon, underneath the blazing sky,
I'll be where the eagles flying higher and higher!
Gonna be your man in motion,
all I need is a pair of wheels.
Take me where the fututre's lying; St. Elmo's fire!!

I can climb the highest mountain, cross the wildest sea.
I can feel St. Elmo's fire burning in me
burning in me!! gun thug.gif

Just once in his life a man has his time
and my time is now - I'm coming alive. dildollwhite.gif

I can hear the music playin'
I can see the banners fly
Feel like a vet again - I hope I ain't high! LARS!.gif

Gonna be your man in motion
all I need is a pair of wheels
Take me where the futures lying; St. Elmo's fire!!

I can see a new horizon underneath the blazing sky,
I'll be where the eagles flying higher and higher!
Gonna be your man in motion
all I need is a pair of wheels.
Take me where the fututre's lying; St. Elmo's fire!!

I can climb the highest mountain, cross the wildest sea
I can feel St. Elmo's fire burning in me!!
burning in me.
Burning!! DarthVader2.gif
Burning in me torch.gif
I can feel it burning.. burning inside of me. ironchef-1.gif

Now don't you feel better? Tissue2.png
rjordan
Morrigan, I'm amazed that you knew all of those words by heart. dev.gif
Morrigan
rjordan, that would be just sick & wrong. I do, however, have elite Google skills.
rjordan
Agreed! And agreed. I was just joshin' anyways. Smokin Monkey.gif
Absomphe
Morrigan:

Pretty handy and important skills to have, as my wife demonstrates to me about umpteen times per day!
Head_prosthesis
Abby, is your wife always telling you to "go look it up" too?

Morrigan,

I just got outta the shower.
Why'd have to go and ruin that?

Nice use of emoticons though.
Absomphe
Heady: In a word:






YES!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! bet.gif
Absomphe
She kinda put a damper on the ole St.Elmo's fire, eh?...don't fret, you're still young, and so is the evening. hula-1.gif
Jack Batemaster
QUOTE
Roses sparkle in the midnight sky
I wonder how the birds fly
Or how fish swim
And how to win the girl who flips your fin
OR wags your tale
And is preter than any whale
They say there is plenty of fish in the sea
But she's the only one for me
I talk and talk but can't she see she the only one for me
I think and think about her pretey wink
I am not a wimp or a pimp
I'm nothing but a chimp in love
NO i am more like a dove
Peaceful and calm all morning long
Till I see that asome face
It is preter thanany face
For i am in love with out the look from here face


-Slake

Absomphe
Slake...wherever thou may be:


Hooker(ed) on phonics may yet save your soul from the flaming pit of eternal damnation... dev.gif

Or at least help your grammar and spelling a bit!!
Absomphe
Jack:

Thanks for the inspirational POME!

I think I'll SLAKE my thirst now with a ginuwine absynthee*

* cuz dem Nortwest Skools eye never attended really ayn't awl thair craked up to bee!
Jack Batemaster
ain't dat th truthe.
Absomphe
Ewe bedcha!!
Head_prosthesis
Slake put up a new Valentine's Day poem for Winnie.



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Farts blossom under the sheets
I like Absinthe, because it's really neat!

I have no rhyme, I have no reason
Asome face pretey wink, here be the season...

Winnie puts sticky in the palm of my hand
When I'm stroking the chokey part of his glans

A puppet, a fist, a mouthful of dump
When he's working my strings, I feel like a chump

I don't have sense or balls of brass
I'm not a pimp, I'm a stupid ass

I don't know love, I don't know joy
I'm simply Winnies Monkey Boy

-Slake

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Absomphe
I wish I had talent no.gif
Mulletman
The idea that poetry needs to rhyme is ridiculous.........all that does is restrict it to sounding like dr. seuss book. The most important thing I think in a poem is it's imagery and rhythm.
Head_prosthesis
WRONG!

Ridiculous maybe,
Rhyming baby! It's all about rhyming.
Mulletman
See I was going to post something I wrote last night after a few absintheglass2.gif but now you scared me away ranting.gif
Head_prosthesis
Hey man. It's just my opinion anyway.
I don't know nothing.
Artemis
"The idea that poetry needs to rhyme is ridiculous.........all that does is restrict it to sounding like dr. seuss book."

In Xanadu did Kublai Khan a stately pleasure dome decree
Where Alph, the sacred river ran through caverns measureless to man
Down to a sunlit sea.

If that's Dr. Seuss, give me some of what Dr. Seuss was smoking.

Poetry doesn't NEED to rhyme. Good poetry is good poetry whether it rhymes or not. If it's good AND it rhymes, that's just the shit on the shingle.

"The forty dollar bill didn't matter no more
when her sister got nekkid
and laid on the floor
She said: Dyna Moe might win the bet
But she could use a little *! if I wasn't done yet ...

Kiss my aura, Dora.
And how bout you Fauna? Ya wanna?"

Frank Zappa

For that matter, Dr. Seuss is better than at least half the
"poetry" ever written.

Son of Sam I Am.
Artemis
I apologize for not making allowance for allusions to alliteration.
Artemis
So I pulled on her hair
Got her legs in the air
And asked if she had any
COOTIES in there .....

She was buns up kneelin
I was wheelin and dealin
She surrendered to the feelin

Further poetic musings from Frank
Donnie Darko
Not sure if Samuel Beckett was plotzed when he wrote this, but he's Irish, so it would be safe to assume he was:

"Ooftish"--

offer it up plank it down
Golgotha was only the potegg
cancer angina it is all one to us
cough up your T.B. don't be stingy
no trifle is too trifling not even a thrombus
anything venereal is especially welcome
that old toga in the mothballs
don't be sentimental you won't be wanting it again
send it along we'll put it in the pot with the rest
with your love requited and unrequited
the things taken too late the things taken too soon
the spirit aching bullock's scrotum
you won't cure it you won't endure it
it is you it equals you any fool has to pity you
so parcel up the whole issue and send it along
the whole misery diagnosed undiagnosed misdiagnosed
get your friends to do the same we'll make use of it
we'll make sense of it we'll put it in the pot with the rest
it all boils down to blood of lamb


--Samuel Beckett, 1938
ormus
Rhym and mine have no time, but for this post I find
a finger on my mind, an opportunity to shine.
I keep reading about Dr Suess and how to rhym. Yes I know i used twice the rhym, ok three but don't whine. It's getting hard trying to find another word like time mind or climb. Oh climb, not bad, but I am getting off subject. The moral my limes is that it's not hard to rhym, (ha 4), but keeping that rhym the same, that takes a mind.

Not mine of course, cause you can see how off my course I really am. But i like this topic and don't want to get off it, so I guess I'll just end with hi, howya, I'm new and not very patriotic.

Damn, this is hard. spam.gif
Head_prosthesis
Flow baby!
Mulletman
I guess I usually think of poetry as personal/comtemplative/blah i can't think and usually Seuss wasn't like that. Except for the Lorax......he was a good guy. And to whoever didn't know Seuss was the prime product of LSD. Maybe I'll post that poem I wrote last night anyways....
Absomphe
Not to mention, one unsubtly perverted amigo...

I mean "Fox in Socks"... funny, sounds just like censored2.gif. shock.gif

What was all that really about, huh?
Artemis
I'm not the fig nor the fig plucker's son
But I'll pluck the figs til the fig plucker comes.

Say that three times real fast.
hartsmar
Reminds me of english class in third grade:

"She sells sea shells on the sea shore
and the shells she sells are sea shells for sure"



Artemis
Somehow tiptoeing the bestiality line is missing from the seashore ditty.
Absomphe
Try as I might, it's almost impossible not to say pigf**ker...

Hey, let's get Hartsmar to try it...

He'll try anything.

Hey, Hartsmar! dev.gif
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